It's really good I loved how you captured Mace in part two.

And as Ricky would say to Lucy: You got alot a splaining to do!!!! That's Good.

I'm interested in what is going on, but I reserve more comment until I see a few more chapters to get a better feel for where the story is going. It would be like someone asking what I think of a novel after reading two pages. I like the internal dialog though. Just like a kid knowing his lies have started to unravel but not knowing what the how much the parent already knows. His stomach in his throat worrying about it.

good writing, but i have to say, i prefer gl's plot

but i like the writing, and good effort! keep it up

And so the *PLOT* thickens.......I wonder, Is Mace overcome with FEAR over Anakin's reactions or is he considering that Anakin maybe a *traitor* or some sorts? I'll keep reading to find out......Keep it up! Doing good....ANGEL