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Rive's Uncharted Settlements
by: Rive Caedo
date posted: Feb 18, 2006 9:38 PM  | 
updated: Feb 19, 2006 8:38 AM
What's The Story?
Well this is mostly a bonus entry today, I'll be posting another in a few hours (It's done, but I'm not posting it yet... Long story).

So Hyperspacers have that newish fancy "What's the story?" feature. I love it... But I'm not much of a world molder... I'm not great at building backstories. Not that I've tried much :p

Still, when I saw that little Ortolan... I couldn't resist throwing a rushed entry into the pool.

It was also an opprotunity to try to get some obscure Firefly references into the Star Wars Universe :D

The main problem with it was that it told the story of what was happening in that moment and the character's family more than the character and his history himself, I knew it had very little chance of making it in... Oh well, I'm still rather fond of an Otrolan uprising because they ran out of good food in a prison camp. (Max Rebo, the Otrolan in Return of the Jedi, signed an exclusive deal with Jabba the Hutt to play only for him all the time... In exchange for all the free food the band could eat. I figured the trait was common to most of the race):p

It ended up over the 2000 character limit when I finished writing it... So any odd wording is probably due to me having deleted words and such to get it under the 2000 character limit for "What's the Story?"

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So there's my first little attempt at writing official Star Wars material, provided I don't get scathing reviews down below in the comments field and rotten fruit tossed at me... I suspect it won't be the last. Look for more failed submissions in the coming months :D

"Their personal food supplies ran out and the CIS refused to provide the camp with anything but basic rations, not appeasing to the refined Otrolan palette, tension gradually built"

Well at least I thought it was funny. :p

  Michelle1968
M68- Star Wars Kid at Heart
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 10:54 PM
That was very good Rive! I'd buy it! :)
  Master_Kenobi17
Takin Over For Talon
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:01 PM
"Their personal food supplies ran out and the CIS refused to provide the camp with anything but basic rations, not appeasing to the refined Otrolan palette, tension gradually built"

Well at least I thought it was funny.


Here I realized you were playing off of Darth Vicomte's blog. After reading it a couple times, I did chuckle at the idea of them rebelling only after going wihtout their fine cuisine for so long.

Nice Firefly references. I expected the escape ship to be the S.S. Serenity or something.
  Rive Caedo
Rive's Uncharted Settlements
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:08 PM
Nice Firefly references. I expected the escape ship to be the S.S. Serenity or something.

I believe before I had to cut it down to 2000 characters I had the CIS supply ship named "Automated Serenity" or some such. I liked the idea of CIS commanders having so much faith and pride in their creations that serenity itself became mechanical.
  Master_Kenobi17
Takin Over For Talon
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:09 PM
Now that I read the accepted story through, it sounds too Star Wars-y. The Republic comes to save the day. There's a corrupt leader, who flees, and the good guys win (except for Bees, though).
  Rive Caedo
Rive's Uncharted Settlements
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:20 PM
Yes, overall it didn't really bring anything unique or add anything to the Otrolans as a whole (perhaps that's the kind of entry they like anyway :) ) but I do sort of cackle with glee at the idea of Max Rebo with a lightsaber.... The same type of cackle I had at the Ithorian Jedi in the Clone Wars cartoons. So I'm not really complaining or saying mine was better. Just wanted to give people a glance into my thought prosess and what might have been :D

I'm writing up an entry for the DC0052 speeder (current "What's the Story?" contender) in another window... Hopefully it'll fair better :)

I like the idea of leaving a semi-permenant mark on the EU
  Master_Kenobi17
Takin Over For Talon
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:33 PM
I like the idea of leaving a semi-permenant mark on the EU

I can think of few things better than to be a real life part of something I love so much.

Oh, and about the DC0052 speeder, make sure you include its sith systems, complete with "two by two, hands of blue" when coming into close proximity with a sith lord and his blue dark side lightning (I'm just kidding that's horrible).

Much luck with the entry and heads up: Nathan Fillion has a new movie coming out, some horror flick. I was probably the only one in the theater who got excited to see him on screen.
  Rive Caedo
Rive's Uncharted Settlements
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:39 PM
Oh, and about the DC0052 speeder, make sure you include its sith systems, complete with "two by two, hands of blue" when coming into close proximity with a sith lord and his blue dark side lightning (I'm just kidding that's horrible).

Yeah that is pretty horrible... I think I'll just say that it was produced by "Yucantakethskiifrome" motors. That's totally believable and will blend seemlessly with the entry I'm sure... :p
  Master_Kenobi17
Takin Over For Talon
date Posted: Feb 18, 2006 11:45 PM
Ha! Canon is only what Lucasfilm Ltd. makes it.
  DarthVicomte
Vicomte's Blog Extravaganza (Now Defunct)
date Posted: Feb 19, 2006 3:30 PM
Three in the first line, nice!

I wrote one a while back, it included a gambling drunk that had his legs ripped off by a salvage droid, I wonder why it didn't make it?
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